Ok, so I need somewhere to put my all the darlings I kill. Some I do admit are a waste of time. They need to be offed. However, like this one, I just LOVE IT! And I might still use it somewhere in the novel. But for now, I'd like to share one of my favorite darlings.
Oh, and if you're wondering, a 'darling' is a word, line of words, paragraph, or even a whole chapter that you utterly LOVE! But for reasons beyond your control, they just don't work! Your book will be better for their departure. However...they are your darlings!
I think the massacre is the hardest part of editing. Maybe why many writers stop short of brilliance because they just can't do it. It hurts too much!
This one hurt me a lot! Yet, it had to be done...and done it is. I am forever encasing this lovely darling on my blog so I can come back to it and weep...and maybe find a new place for it. Oh, wouldn't that just be so nice! To resurrect a darling!
Yes. That's why we hold on to them for far too long. Main reason I couldn't edit chapter three was because of this little one.
Staring between the door I came in, a sign adhered to its back labeled exit, and an opposing door with a sign reading office, I feel like running. I want to leave. Then again, I have to stay. Thankfully, I’m alone in the waiting room, free to sweat bullets one second and attempt some form of relaxation the next.
Annoying as it is, I am getting used to this rollercoaster emotional thing: In the three weeks it’s taken me to make the appointment, I’ve traversed between the two extremes more than once.
Rest in peace my lovely words...
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6 awesome comments!:
Oh you're writing in first person...brave! Buh bye darling...I should find one I removed today..off to the cabin to search.
Breeze
first person...I know! But I've grown to love it so much I'm not sure I could ever write in third again!...of course, if an editor/agent requested such to publish, I might ;)
this one. It was erroneous because I had gone into the same description before this about her guilt feelings. But I like the descripton and if anybody has any guilty feelings in the future I will use a modified version of it.
She was off plucking a dead flower from a planter and it gave Chris a moment to hesitate and then she offered words that rung fake in her ears.
“Time will make it easier I guess” her mind still on the revelation of the moment before. Oh God, what if this was her fault.
Guilt laid a familiar net over her head, trapping her in its mesh, tangling her with the idea that she had caused this, that she had been the reason he was sad, the reason he had died. She was caught in the idea, the thoughts repeating themselves, dragging her under, drowning her with the possibility that because she had let him go he had gone for good.
Please excuse spelling/typos if they exist because I didn't bother proofing a cottage darling..lol..
Breeze
wow, from 'Guilt' to 'good', paragraph two...I'd find somewhere else for that. No need to have it in the cottage if you can find a place for it! I like it ;)
Yes...someone else will be wracked with guilt and get that description...if not this book, the next..it is one of my darlingest darlings...heck..perhaps I'll take out the other description and send this one back..oh the decisions...
Breeze
My darling is back. I rewrote the first part of chapter one and this one got to come home to stay and it works well now. The rest of the darlings are still at the cottage for another day...lol
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